Poll: Considering this was the prologue, would you read chapter 1?
I would!
If I have too much time on my hands.
meh, I don't think I would, no offence
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Chapter 1. redone. I'd love feedback
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(08-03-2018, 03:35 PM)Nylon Wrote:
(08-03-2018, 01:24 PM)Mikaruge108 Wrote: Just one thing I noticed: the sentence "they took a drink." "They" needs to be capitalized, other than that this seems to be a very good start of a story.

You're right, I actually had this fixed on my laptop but forgot updating the post. Thanks Mika! Welcome to the thread Heart 
May I ask what impression you got from Galdon?

sorry it took me so long to reply; I thought the character is interesting, as for the story itself, well it has a certain je ne sais quoi to it.
I will show you a dance cloaked in shadow!
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