10-25-2018, 07:48 AM
(This post was last modified: 10-25-2018, 07:50 AM by PhantomUnderYourDesk.)
It's a bit hard and difficult for me to read without it being made clear who speaks when, so I'd appreciate the usage of the dialoge rules Polaris already mentioned. It'll add more flow to the story. Once that's done, I'd be happy to reread your story.
And, ehm, something must have gone wrong with Chapter 4 as the writing is completely messed up and impossible to properly read. o.o;
Could you fix that please?
And, ehm, something must have gone wrong with Chapter 4 as the writing is completely messed up and impossible to properly read. o.o;
Could you fix that please?
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